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FINGER PIE (Free verse) by titan69

When we are in bed at night. And I put my arm around you. When my finger tips touch your soft skin. When I get up close and slowly move in. To me it always seems like the first time, that first kiss. =========================================== As you will see. A women under the covers in the dark. never ages.??

Stephen Robins 13-May-04/5:42 AM
The title of this poem implies one of two things - firstly a pie full of fingers - that would be grotesque, or secondly some form of instruction where you would have to literally finger a pie.

The poem however appears to be about putting a child to bed. This poem is confused and poorly written and you may not have noticed but their is a large irrelevant line in the middle.

This all leads me to believe that you are a stultified quim.




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