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Alone (Free verse) by Artemis745
My wish and my folly Secretly my desire The hopes and dreams Swirling 'round your deity being My worthiness intangible My devoutness unsacred A love forever unspoken Eternally flaming Flawfully you exist within me Perfectly settled in your niche Circles of cloven wings flutter by A faceless entity living within your mist Your life and infinity Mean all the same to me A pointlessly meaningful death Entraps me in it's lair And you walk by unheedingly.

Up the ladder: heart & soul
Down the ladder: The Lonely Man

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.6
Weighted score: 4.833116
Overall Rank: 10794
Posted: September 15, 2003 6:32 AM PDT; Last modified: September 15, 2003 6:32 AM PDT
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[4] nentwined @ 66.92.183.34 | 15-Sep-03/6:41 AM | Reply
I think the "big words" are trying too hard for something that's been said too much. Though "cloven wings" has me curious. ?
[5] Garrett S Sexton @ 81.131.217.193 | 15-Sep-03/2:21 PM | Reply
I smell pixies. GOOD 5
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