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Pina Colada Belle (Free verse) by Don-Quixote
- My dear seraphic girlie that wore that purple rose dress, do you remember them smoke filled nights? We would laugh, inbetween the clink of pina coloda glasses. You would be yappin like some amphetamine laboratory experiment, and I'd listen to your voice, while trying my best to peer into those brown eyes that you loved to hide behind your long bangs. I can still smell the candles that were hung over the screen door. Vanilla, you loved that aroma... There were not many that could sit there and actually tollerate the endless rant. You might have been talking about pluto, but my ears never paid any attention to the words they would just record the melody of your sonance... We would perch our intoxicated selves on the wooden bench, watching the sun rise. Well, you were always the one gazing at the ascension of earth's mellow yellow star. You never knew that my eyes took photographs of those pulchritudinous hands, holding that white alcoholic slurpee. I love this oil painted memory the most: Your elfin hand revealing those brown scintillant orbs, as you pushed that natural veil back and pinned it neatly behind your ear. ========================================================== I AM PROUD TO BE THE MUSH MASTER, TOKE MY SNAKE!!!

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.8
Weighted score: 5.2145653
Overall Rank: 4346
Posted: August 10, 2003 1:31 AM PDT; Last modified: August 10, 2003 3:22 AM PDT
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[0] Retaliate @ 4.46.73.15 | 10-Aug-03/3:13 AM | Reply
Slightly disappointed DQ (not the poem but the footnote)

Don Quixote would never apologize, too immersed in what he is to be anything but brave.

Sometimes we are what we are, expectant filter be damned. A 0 until you remove the apology. :)
[n/a] Don-Quixote @ 204.31.171.100 > Retaliate | 10-Aug-03/3:21 AM | Reply
okl doki, ill do that then, ILL BE BRAVE!!

-runs nekkid into the forests on an lsd and amt adventure-
HOLY SHIT LOOK AT THAT LECTRIC LIGHTIN@!?!?!
[8] abecedarian @ 4.46.73.15 > Don-Quixote | 10-Aug-03/3:27 AM | Reply
still an apology of sorts but no amount of logic can defend against 'toke my snake'.
[n/a] Don-Quixote @ 204.31.171.100 > abecedarian | 10-Aug-03/3:31 AM | Reply
hehehe. ;P
[n/a] Don-Quixote @ 204.31.171.100 > Retaliate | 10-Aug-03/3:22 AM | Reply
i think your going to like that new note lmao.
[9] http://mulberryfairy @ 216.195.144.188 | 10-Aug-03/7:21 AM | Reply
Between your other, more feminine sounding screenname, (which always, at first glance, has me imagine you as a 29 year old white female) and this talk of pina coladas, I am starting to re-question your purported gender. (I, personally, love pina colada's but am allowed to by society because I am a woman.)

I love the way you've conveyed how oblivious you were to what she was talking about and how you managed to report the loosely constructed thoughts that were drifting through your mind.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.182.137 > http://mulberryfairy | 10-Aug-03/7:41 PM | Reply
lol, im male, 100%. if i start to grow a clit, ill tell you lmao. :P Don-Quixote means "dreamer". happy that you enjoyed it. it.
Yeah, I know you are male, I just think of you as female for a split second every time I see your screen name. It could be one of those clit/penis thingies, take a closer look. (Glad you have a sense of humor about it, anyhow).
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.182.137 > http://mulberryfairy | 10-Aug-03/9:12 PM | Reply
yeah, i never knew so many people would see it as a feminine name when i decided to use it.. oh well.

Clite/penis thingies? im no hermaphrodite ;P
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 11-Aug-03/12:25 AM | Reply
A superb piece, and very fresh. One of my favourites of yours. be proud, good work.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.163.90 > <{Baba^Yaga}> | 11-Aug-03/6:34 AM | Reply
thanks ;)
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