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Goddess of the vineyard (Free verse) by INTRANSIT Vinifera creep
reach longingly to entwine her.
Knowing exactly when the grapes will be
harvested, she will dote on them
until they are ready
then walk away weeping
tears of joy.
Up the ladder:
An Ode to Anal Joy
Down the ladder:
A Gordian knot (Some dirt on a friend of mine)
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Posted: June 11, 2003 8:49 AM PDT; Last modified: June 12, 2003 6:08 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.6723537 Overall Rank: 2016 Comments:
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horus8 @ 24.126.113.154
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11-Jun-03/12:44 PM
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and bare feet. (I'll send you my edit from last night, it obviously didn't reach you, stand by).
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INTRANSIT @ 64.12.96.139
> horus8
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11-Jun-03/1:00 PM
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I thought about the bareness. I think there were system probs last night. we couldn't gt on line this mornin'.
LAst 2 lines of S1 just fuck it up, other than that I really absorbed myself in to this so I ask you from the bottom of my tiny black heart, change it. 7
powerful. lovely. grapey.
When they're ready she just walks away? Are you sure?
yes, she is only part of the vineyard, not the winery. and she did.:( I pray she keeps in touch with us all.
So are there other Goddesses? Maybe you should write about all the Gods involved? (In touch with me?).
mornin'. and yes, you, all of her friends. I have found, that once a life has been entered, it is there for eternity. whether the soul is concious of it, or not.
Once a life has been entered, it is there for eternity? Sounds deep, please explain.
a short interaction between two people, or a group of people, leaves something on or in all parties involved.
Ohhhhh... viruses?!
well, yes, that's the downside. I was thinking more on a spiritual level. Maybe I'm just being influenced because I'm reading Rumi right now.
So you're talking about cause and effect? Spiritual influence? An exchange of love or pain or anything? so the attendant at the gas station has some kind of spiritual influence over me?
yes,yes,yes,maybe. if you say talked briefly about something other than the exchange of money for fuel,yes. but he/she does not have influence OVER you. some change happens,even if it is not immediately apparent. am I making sense?
Rumi's good stuff.
Glad to see a "decent" poem, at last!!
Yes, I agree Tina, now hold me my little terrorist, love me.
yes nice logic/ flow
a bit in the spirit of an extended haiku
Interesting Idea about the spiritual influence but it still sounds like a stretch to me. I Love this poem by the way. -10-
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