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Haiku (Haiku) by INTRANSIT Seventy degrees
Reservior reflects starlight
Fish hours equal human
Up the ladder:
The Slanty Shanty
Down the ladder:
Shy
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Posted: December 10, 2002 6:08 PM PST; Last modified: December 10, 2002 6:08 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.1152606 Overall Rank: 5980 Comments:
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Bachus @ 24.126.113.154
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10-Dec-02/8:07 PM
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i caught an eighteen lb striper last spring..i thought it was a shark. no shit.
not sure iunderstand the last line...
I was thinking about if fish tell time the way humans can by starlight or sunlight.
i'm not sure that comes through.
maybe you should pose it as a question: do fish clocks have hands? not that that conveys the meaning any more clearly...but it amuses me.
maybe this is too much to be questioned in a haiku. maybe not. maybe yes.
that's what I was kind of thinking, too much stuff. Am I anywhere near a true haiku? I need to check because no sense in trying an I/P if I haven't gotten a simple haiku right. right?
completely different animals.
ok, I can accept that. stiiiilll, am i even in the ballpark?
Nice haiku.
Did you miss me?
absofrigginlutely! Whydya leave? Glad you're back. You are back,
aren't you? 238 view(s)
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