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The Good Old Days in New Orleans (Haiku) by cobalt it rains and rains and
everything's underwater
except the bodies
Up the ladder:
first kiss
Down the ladder:
Gone Away
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Posted: September 27, 2002 8:57 AM PDT; Last modified: September 27, 2002 8:57 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.9138427 Overall Rank: 1426 Comments:
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knickytoy @ 24.45.19.89
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27-Sep-02/9:06 AM
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Gruesome but effective.
gruesome? hmm. all the graves are above ground so they DON'T get flooded (as NO is below sea-level). THAT would be gruesome! this is really nice. simple, where everyone else, especially me, fails in the haiku.
yeah, but in "the good old days' they didn't used to be. that's exactly why...but then, you probably knew about the yellow fever?
demented, which is my favorite flavor besides simple vanilla. like the british say, good show.
I was thinking more a long the lines of living people. Refrencing spirits or mood. Either way it works.9
easy...noah..back away from the arc and put the the pair of vietnamese box turtles down 7.
I must agree with Brazen - good show. Nice to meet you Cobalt.
clever.
Very nice. That last line took me aback. I had to re-read it to make sure I read it correctly. Good imaging.
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