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IN THE OUTPOST OF WORDS (Free verse) by daggatolar Not all face is fear
held hostage
In the making of a mask
words come against meaning
the Drum does the dancing
and the feet not tied down tired
out of life can learn
how to wander in the outpost of words
To think in the inside of your head
Words are missing not letters
is a new suffer of crushing out
so we make do
of our living out pour of life out
in droplets
Up the ladder:
not a criminal
Down the ladder:
Killer Gap
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Posted: August 2, 2010 5:36 AM PDT; Last modified: August 2, 2010 5:36 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.0474257 Overall Rank: 6921 Comments:
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29-Aug-10/9:18 PM
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I like it all, especially 2nd verse, but am distracted by 1st line and 11th
i don't mind the language - clever enough - but the emotional content i find a bit dry. maybe that's the whole point, but i'm not really feeling it.
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