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On Any Given Day... (Free verse) by Skamper
her voice in the background drones her hair shiney myriads of splinters a timely study she speaks - cream linen from painted lips and even teeth she talks death – murder and otherwise blood and other bits the lost child - assuming we know of raping and torture like she really doesn’t have to animate it rained today it will rain tomorrow and more than likely the next football honours won – lost dreams taken re-distributed wealth and gains outlined in static A made-up face tanned – rouged talks of life-saving dogs and silly old cat ladies pitch and volume even – non-threatening Soothing? I listen – not threatened I no longer give a fuck

Up the ladder: a bit of theory
Down the ladder: Anger

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Weighted score: 5.2384057
Overall Rank: 4141
Posted: October 22, 2007 9:31 PM PDT; Last modified: October 22, 2007 9:31 PM PDT
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[n/a] INTRANSIT @ 204.110.228.254 | 23-Oct-07/1:15 PM | Reply
Gonna chew on this a while.
[9] Musicman @ 192.208.44.100 | 24-Oct-07/6:30 AM | Reply
Ah! Shades of Bukowski. What a wonderful read. This would go well in a darkened room among friends. Snug in the wooly cotton arms of infamy!
[n/a] Skamper @ 58.171.50.85 > Musicman | 26-Oct-07/3:38 PM | Reply
thankyou I feel warmed already :)
[9] Musicman @ 192.208.44.100 | 24-Oct-07/6:31 AM | Reply
And, oh yes. The last two lines are pure Bukowski, so I would not be concerned with whoever this "rockmage" guy is. SOunds like he needs to read more and write less.
[n/a] Skamper @ 58.171.92.150 > Musicman | 26-Oct-07/3:47 PM | Reply
I have read some Bukowski - my favourite, The Great Slob

ah!..rockmage - enigma or arsehole?
[8] Dovina @ 66.215.80.177 | 26-Oct-07/4:25 PM | Reply
I love "she speaks cream linen from painted lips." Too many dashes throuout.
[n/a] Skamper @ 58.171.152.65 > Dovina | 27-Oct-07/3:48 AM | Reply
thanks :)

The dashes are very habit forming and I reach for the key without realising - *sigh*
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