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He's... (Other) by holliebollie_19 Everday I sit and wait,
Only to get a date,
Why should I try,
All I want to do is cry,
The guy I like,
Thinks I need to take a hike,
I try not to care,
But he's always there,
Everyday and night,
We have never had a fight,
A friend says we're perfect together,
I know I shouldn't even tried to bother,
Everyone think we shouldn't be togeter forever,
But I think not,
Although he's really hot,
He's all I got,
That's atleast what I thought,
He's easy to read,
He's like a book,
He's a stude,
So because of that; you have to look,
Because he's not a dud,
I like him a lot,
And he's really really hot,
He's the best,
And better than the rest,
He is great,
Even if I don't get a date.
Up the ladder:
time
Down the ladder:
Relief (Ventilation Shaft rewrite)
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.6666665
Posted: January 14, 2007 4:21 PM PST; Last modified: January 14, 2007 4:21 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.1986713 Overall Rank: 4592 The following users have marked this poem on their favorites list:
Comments:
THis poem is about Brady.
I'd rather you write often, rather than worry too much about writing well, at this stage of the game.
Couple of typos in here need fixing.
Influences?
There's a mysterious quality to this poeme... something I can't quite pinpoint... I find it haunting... real... it's very powerful... do you often try to evoke such emotions in your work?
ya i try to
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If you REALLY like to write and want to get better...read some poetry and learn to use imagery and detail and try writing something that's not the lovelorn ramblings of bored student. You're going to get made fun of posting things like this. I don't mean to quit writing entirely...I don't think that anyone should do that...just work on it before you post it. Cheers.