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The Picture (Free verse) by Caducus
Zealous and orange was my ‘crayola’ Sun. Shards were made by sleeves as I brushed away crushed wax. My father was an orb, I drew him indigo eyes making the edges perfect. He breathed grey curls next to scribbled brothers. I drew my Mother straight by Tulips she planted, crossed her auburn hair out yet made her lips Pink pressing till the crayon snapped so her beauty wouldn’t fade. I drew myself by her side, shadow black next to Jesus who I stabbed a year later with the mocking sun on the day when I prayed by a vase of fresh tulips for life to pink again.

Up the ladder: Fiery Hands
Down the ladder: Endurance

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.6666665
Weighted score: 4.9602656
Overall Rank: 8607
Posted: December 14, 2006 10:34 AM PST; Last modified: December 14, 2006 10:34 AM PST
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[8] Dovina @ 75.82.106.103 | 14-Dec-06/12:57 PM | Reply
I like this up to the last stanza. There, the angst about Jesus seems another subject, detracting from the unique way this picture was painted or drawn.
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