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When (Free verse) by OneFingerAnswer
When I can`t feel that my skin is cold When leaving friends file into the fold When they only come dressed in black When they see me made up on my back When they offer each other a drink When my flesh is grey under brushed on pink When I wear a suit I never put on I`ll remember you even when I`m gone

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.571429
Weighted score: 5.153681
Overall Rank: 5184
Posted: September 4, 2002 10:40 PM PDT; Last modified: September 4, 2002 10:41 PM PDT
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[n/a] vulcan @ 213.29.102.17 | 4-Sep-02/11:49 PM | Reply
All right!
[9] Robert K Foster @ 209.68.64.11 | 5-Sep-02/11:06 AM | Reply
nicely done. lovely morbidity. cool.
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