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Present, tense (Free verse) by INTRANSIT I had built
a beautiful home
right down to its
stained glass windows.
Up the ladder:
The Forgetting
Down the ladder:
A "sirius"makeover
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Posted: August 29, 2005 3:12 PM PDT; Last modified: August 30, 2005 5:00 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.192101 Overall Rank: 4648 Comments:
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Dovina @ 17.255.240.138
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29-Aug-05/7:30 PM
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what? Say again.
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Dovina @ 12.72.22.255
> Dovina
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30-Aug-05/11:05 AM
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Okay, kinda funny or sad, could be really grotesque.
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INTRANSIT @ 205.188.116.198
> Dovina
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30-Aug-05/11:34 AM
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sposa be sad.
hm.
why the apostrophe on its? I'm seeing this as a puzzle, but I don't see the first bit of string to unravel. I need something more to make it tense, and I'd rather it actually be in present tense. Or I'm missing the cosmic joke, which would not be that unusual...
Yeah. I knew there was something that needed changing to make this work. the house is now a home.
Not your best work, but I like it.
Hey, I'm back...isn't everyone glad!
I'm betting you live in a hurricane path, and the windows are now a stained glass driveway. Am I close?
Erm, no. But that's funny! And again I'm close to what I want to say here. damn.
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