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Wrapping a Gift (Free verse) by Dovina
Alone in my closet, of manifold wrappings, I look for the one that suggests a sly gift. Perhaps a suit, like a lawyer in court? He’d deduce pretense. A logical No. The hippie skirt with tasseled brown top? Opinionated, he’d think, She’s full of herself. Should I look slinky, revealing and bare? Too bold, he’d muse with a smirk. Maybe jeans and a shirt, clothes a man could wear? A tigress, he’d see. And God knows I’m not. The old-lady dress for impressing the folks? A preacher for sure, she’s in for the kill. The cotton print shift, casual and free? She doesn’t care, won’t even dress up. A gift in red velvet, conservative, plain? Not cliché, or elegant, but alluring in form. Yes, he will ponder and say with a grin, She inspires imagining.

Up the ladder: The Thomas Brown Affair
Down the ladder: She Doesn't Love Me.

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.2
Weighted score: 5.2622466
Overall Rank: 3985
Posted: August 24, 2005 2:21 PM PDT; Last modified: August 24, 2005 3:11 PM PDT
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[10] INTRANSIT @ 64.12.116.67 | 24-Aug-05/2:58 PM | Reply
A bunch of no-nos. By that I mean you can just lose the beginning nos', the changes of mind.
[n/a] Dovina @ 12.72.4.44 > INTRANSIT | 24-Aug-05/3:12 PM | Reply
Hold that thought, and try it again, please - revised.
[10] INTRANSIT @ 64.12.116.67 | 24-Aug-05/3:19 PM | Reply
Yes this makes me happy.
[n/a] Dovina @ 12.72.4.44 > INTRANSIT | 24-Aug-05/3:22 PM | Reply
My job is done here.
[10] INTRANSIT @ 64.12.116.67 | 24-Aug-05/3:28 PM | Reply
Who cares what he thinks anyway. I say, Cork Pumps and a pair of daisy dukes should do the trick!
[n/a] Dovina @ 12.72.28.255 > INTRANSIT | 24-Aug-05/9:09 PM | Reply
Who cares what he thinks? Who cares what he thinks!!!? Are you not listening to all the times I've harped at you? I care! You man, you. Oh, I see, you're one of those guy who says he looks past the clothes, so they don't matter. Well, at least allow me the fantasy.
[10] Bethy @ 24.222.32.240 | 24-Aug-05/3:29 PM | Reply
This will be me on Saturday night...yup! I shaved my legs and got me a date...lol...*10* :) Bethy(a fav!)
[n/a] Dovina @ 12.72.28.255 > Bethy | 24-Aug-05/9:12 PM | Reply
Hey, that's great. How about a spaghetti-strap top with a crinkle-skirt, just below the knee, so popular in Paris these days?
[n/a] ALChemy @ 65.188.89.69 | 25-Aug-05/10:00 AM | Reply
My dear it's merely a matter of T's and D’s.
You can choose to be chaste
or choose to be chased
but rarely is a woman both of these
for most men are lead from their waist.
[n/a] ALChemy @ 65.188.89.69 > ALChemy | 25-Aug-05/10:02 AM | Reply
led
[8] zodiac @ 212.118.19.227 > ALChemy | 26-Aug-05/5:10 AM | Reply
A matter of T & A, rather.
[8] zodiac @ 212.118.19.227 | 26-Aug-05/5:12 AM | Reply
I happen to be listening right now to a song with one of the sexiest lines I know:

- So go outside in the desert heat,
get your dress all wet and send it to me.

My suggestion: White cotton panties and nothing else.
[8] LilMsLadyPoet @ 205.188.117.13 > zodiac | 26-Aug-05/4:49 PM | Reply
Zodiac! a kindred spirit, at least as far as that song goes...my all time ever, forever and ever, favorite! Isn't that the absolutely sexiest freaking song you have ever heard?! The entire song is about her in that dress, for those of you who don't know it...David Bowie's 'Cactus', off the Heathen CD...Is worth a definite listen. Oh...cool poem!
[8] zodiac @ 212.118.19.76 > LilMsLadyPoet | 31-Aug-05/5:22 AM | Reply
Um, okay. But the song's originally by the Pixies on Surfer Rosa. It's a different song when you hear odd, fat Frank Black singing that line.
[8] LilMsLadyPoet @ 152.163.100.138 > zodiac | 1-Sep-05/3:57 PM | Reply
Oh...I didn't know! I will have to find it and have a listen. So I take it it is not as sexy as Bowie's version? Bowie's is Hot, Hot, sizzling Hot! (In my opinion...!)
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