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Lake Michigan (Free verse) by jessicazee
Tonight we both watched the news, two girls found dead in Illinois, live at ten, anchors pumped selling thunderstorms, gladdened cancer tales of children in wigs, wishes granted by rich angels... You need to see the weatherman, the shape of our lake an erection at its end, our state your right hand, a palm, we live under a thumb, it will rain all week if we believe in Doppler, pointing men in pinstriped suits forcing us to trust.

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.25
Weighted score: 5.029801
Overall Rank: 7338
Posted: May 3, 2005 2:29 PM PDT; Last modified: May 10, 2005 12:42 AM PDT
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[7] Dovina @ 69.175.32.185 | 10-May-05/1:16 PM | Reply
I don't see how the weatherman forces you to trust. It's all about probabilities. Also, Doppler is a short-time-range tool and does little to predict "rain all week."

"gladdened cancer tales" is good.
[6] wilco @ 24.165.207.93 | 12-May-05/6:17 PM | Reply
Not near as good as the other Lake Michigan one.
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