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What I Exist For (Free verse) by Dovina
This moment will be a long time ago some day a fragile treasure waiting for some unknown assembler to reconstruct it from time’s erasures But this moment with your hand on mine has no precedent or portent has never occurred before nor could happen again For this I came to be and when it ends I will have been

Up the ladder: Bookends
Down the ladder: Memoirs of a miners son

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.8333335
Weighted score: 5.7620006
Overall Rank: 1788
Posted: April 1, 2005 1:01 PM PST; Last modified: April 1, 2005 1:01 PM PST
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[10] francis nor capule @ 12.129.230.11 | 1-Apr-05/7:05 PM | Reply
sigh... that moment's bliss.
[n/a] Dovina @ 12.72.5.179 > francis nor capule | 2-Apr-05/7:30 AM | Reply
Yes, and at the time this feeling was entirely real, still is.
[n/a] Prince of Void @ 62.220.96.231 > Dovina | 5-Apr-05/10:03 PM | Reply
still is there ...in depth of a poet's heart
and in the deep peace of a poet's mind
upon a lake of surreal moments of a poet
open the door of wonders
has been waited so long so far
now close to your inner eyes
it has taken you to other side

by the power is unkown
lies in somewhere in mind

to show you beyond eternity
where you are still here
but You are so far away

[n/a] Dovina @ 12.72.10.85 > Prince of Void | 6-Apr-05/7:50 AM | Reply
"but You are so far away" from what? What do you mean?
[10] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 4.224.24.228 | 2-Apr-05/2:13 AM | Reply
As we all know I'm a sucker for decently written sappy. I love how the last verse says so much, in so few words.

<3 Jason
[n/a] Dovina @ 12.72.5.179 > thepinkbunnyofdoom | 2-Apr-05/7:28 AM | Reply
I usually try to avoid the sappy, but must admit to its lure sometimes.
[10] INTRANSIT @ 204.110.228.254 | 3-Apr-05/3:07 PM | Reply
sappy or not, it works. have another
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