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Sophia, Lets get this over with (Free verse) by thepinkbunnyofdoom
I met you in the absence of light You had me in your thrall with your bite So it shouldn't be such a surprise That you'd turn to dust with the smiling of the dawn Those dumb jokes that no one else got Now I get them, but hindsight is 20/20 And I'll need that, just to hold my hand above my head So that I can drive home this finishing blow The only shades I need, are these dead eyes I can resist your every charm, Because I have to If I don't I'll fall, like so many before me And you'll drink me dry(I don't wanna die) So bare your fangs, and come for me tonight I'm waiting with weapons, for the fight of my life Do you think you can disarm me with your smile? In case you haven't noticed, I'm on to you So lets dance, I brought my wooden dagger I've drank my courage, and have a smoke ready Come, lets dance, with flames and silhouettes Who cares if I get cancer, so long as she doesn't get me first This isn't over, its only begun I will hunt you down, I will end you You got me once, twice, but the third time is the charm Viper, Your venom won't strike home tonight I am basking in the porch light, eyes aimed out With a locked door pressed against my back Ready and waiting, so what are you waiting for? I'm ready, come on, lets get this over with If I don't I'll fall, like so many others before me And you'll drink me dry(I don't wanna die) But to end this, I'll stand ready.


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Arithmetic Mean: 8.0
Weighted score: 5.806824
Overall Rank: 1665
Posted: March 4, 2005 12:03 AM PST; Last modified: March 4, 2005 12:03 AM PST
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[n/a] juliharrelson @ 152.163.100.135 | 19-Mar-05/7:35 PM | Reply
"Come, lets dance, with flames and silhouettes"

I REALLY like that imagery. In fact, your whole poem was like I was right there. I was right. You ARE very articulate...and very intelligent. Poetry pretty much tells on a person, who they are and all that.

A very good piece.
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 4.225.141.102 > juliharrelson | 19-Mar-05/7:55 PM | Reply
Its written from the perspective of one of the character's in one of the short stories I'm writing. Glad you liked it.

<3 Jason
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