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Wedding Poem (Ode) by al-naafiysh
All that I give, I give to you. My past is no longer, my present is temporary, and my future is yours to share forever. Not only do I give my love,but with that love comes patience, understanding, trust, respect and loyalty. I will love you as you are, not as I think you should be. Your heart I will want for myself, but the free spirit that lives within all of us shall not be touched by me. My love is that of a child, pure, innocent and full of trust. My eyes will see all the wrongs, but my heart will forgive. If you choose to soar, I shall soar with you. If you choose to rest, I shall lay by your side. My goal is to give you strength when you are weak. Ease your heart when you feel pain. And lift your spirits when you are down. You are one complete person, just as I am. We shall take these two complete, but separate entities, and form a perfect union. Accept them, enjoy them, and appreciate them, and protect this perfect union. If you ever say fuck them! You'll regret them!

Up the ladder: Smoky Mountain High
Down the ladder: Black streets of Hackney

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.2689414
Overall Rank: 3847
Posted: February 9, 2005 5:54 AM PST; Last modified: February 9, 2005 5:54 AM PST
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[10] jroday @ 204.215.34.146 | 9-Feb-05/12:24 PM | Reply
Now that's reality!
[7] Dovina @ 12.72.10.103 | 9-Feb-05/2:01 PM | Reply

Why do you say, "My goal is . . ." in verse 4, giving a way out, when you don't in the others?

"perfect union" is impossible and weakens the aparently possible committments.

"them" in the last verse is a bit nebulous, and I wonder why you even include this verse.
[n/a] al-naafiysh @ 204.215.33.49 > Dovina | 10-Feb-05/8:18 AM | Reply
Have you ever been married before?
The reason I say my goal is..." in verse is,because at first it was wonderful, after that he became m.f. to live with, but I did'nt want to leave because I thought he would change.
I wanted my marriage to be like my father and mother's.
I know no marriage has the perfect union,and the last verse is reality for some women. you give your all and all, and still get hurt.
Dont get me wrong it happen's both ways.
Your friend the math teacher.
[7] Dovina @ 17.255.240.6 > al-naafiysh | 11-Feb-05/12:02 PM | Reply
Funny, how seeing it in stereo makes all the difference, like staring at two photos until your eyes finally look far enough into the distance to place them together, and the third dimension (the author) pops out.
[0] edpeterson @ 68.252.103.217 | 25-Mar-05/6:06 AM | Reply
Not only do I give my love,but with that love
comes patience, understanding, trust, respect
and loyalty.

wow that says it all right there. -0-
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