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The 80's (Lyric) by wilco
The welcome mat, frayed and faded on a lawn that once held grass. In a neighborhood that’s been downgraded to a beautifully tired mess. The factory has closed its doors and resigned itself to be a haven for the junkies and whores who long ago ceased to see. Chorus: Growing up seemed so far away, but we’re here despite ourselves. And doesn’t it seem strange, how much we’ve changed since the 80’s. A birthday cake in childhood’s frame was perfect for the theme. But we’ve become the people that we swore we’d never be. There’s a certain want for better days with no careers or obligation. But that would take the point away and leave only desperation. Growing up seemed so far away, but we’re here despite ourselves. And doesn’t it seem strange, how much we’ve changed since the 80’s.

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Weighted score: 6.7547417
Overall Rank: 456
Posted: August 17, 2004 3:27 PM PDT; Last modified: August 17, 2004 3:27 PM PDT
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[9] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 | 17-Aug-04/6:09 PM | Reply
"We’ve become the people we swore we'd never be." How many of the young smartoffs on this site will ever say that. Come to think of it, I don’t think I’ll ever say it. “But we’re here despite ourselves” and your song says it well.

The last time I saw you on chat, some jerk calling himself “wiIco” was trying his clumsy hand at impersonation (Notice the capital “I”) Kinda takes the fun out of it ya let it. Oh well, if I had something worthwhile to do, I wouldn’t be on chat. You can always use email.
[n/a] wilco @ 66.162.22.123 > Dovina | 19-Aug-04/4:45 PM | Reply
re: "We’ve become the people we swore we'd never be."

Didn't you ever say to yourself as a kid that you would never become an adult? Usually I won't clarify things like this, but for some reason I felt compelled to do so here. I meant that we've become adults and that we never (or at least I never) thought that I would actually become one.
[8] Dan garcia-Black @ 66.218.59.246 | 18-Aug-04/4:09 AM | Reply
Unusual. A chorus that is longer than the verse.
[7] Prince of Void @ 217.218.131.140 | 18-Aug-04/5:46 AM | Reply
very good that's a nice poem...i like it
[8] sliver @ 63.190.73.143 | 19-Aug-04/8:35 AM | Reply
I think I'm real close to what I wanted to be back then, except for the money of course.
[7] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 80.42.116.52 | 19-Aug-04/12:11 PM | Reply
'80s
[8] klosterfobik @ 64.12.116.140 | 21-Aug-04/11:10 PM | Reply
I like the thought behind the lyrics - very nostalgic,yet depressing in a certain way.
[5] Engelbert Humpalot @ 85.210.249.88 | 3-Nov-06/5:09 AM | Reply
Not at all bad.

Maybe move to a better neighbourhood (If you can afford it).
[1] conny lingers @ 0:0:0:0:0:0:0:1 | 7-Feb-21/12:13 PM | Reply
A bit dreary
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