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Embrace (Cinquain) by MacFrantic Chilly
Upstairs bedroom
And all I know in this
If much overworn constriction
Is love
Up the ladder:
Pain
Down the ladder:
What I Am
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Posted: August 9, 2004 11:57 AM PDT; Last modified: April 13, 2006 1:06 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.7615943 Overall Rank: 11680 Comments:
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Dovina @ 70.38.78.229
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13-Apr-06/3:58 PM
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The grammar is off in the last two lines. I think it says that all you know is love. Okay, but that's not saying much.
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MacFrantic @ 172.191.43.7
> Dovina
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13-Apr-06/7:59 PM
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I could add commas, but that would ruin the form. And I'm sorry if my poem doesn't say much to you, but it wasn't written for you(I hope).
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