zodiac16 Dec 2004

re: your other comments.

1) It could if time was somehow telescoped, which is what the proem proposes, anyway. No, I don't know how that would happen. Some kind of device that shoots figs at near-lightspeed in a direction roughly opposite the bus's motion, maybe. Diagrams to follow.

Also, I'll change the title, which I don't like much.

2) Sure, why not? I find there's missing punctuation all over the place.

3) I don't understand. Or at any rate, I respectfully disagree, especially about the logically sound part.

4) Not uncynically, they don't. But point taken.

5) The narrator didn't see the descent; he just guesses.

Anyway, there are many ways the impact could have been slow enough to only make a man fly while leaving everybody else unharmed. Considering that this is based on a real event (in Jordan, not the U.S., and I was the flying man), you'll just have to take my word for it.

6) The impression's not the narrator's, it's his idea of the opinion of someone who believes in that stuff (i.e., the flying man), so I don't think he (the narrator) is required much to explain.

Also - six lengths of someone's body was too long for a bus, unless the guy was, like, four feet tall or something.

This is the longest comment I've ever posted on one of my own poems. I'm mildly ashamed.