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There Is No Such Thing As A Poem (Free verse) by Aetius

There is no such thing as a poem: There are truths bled out through ink-stained hands; there are Amish tables polished clean through much erasure; there are puddles of words, vomited forth in ecstatic catharsis; there are monsters, unleashed by Frankensteins with pens; there are wild apples, sown by the mad; and tame roses, forced to fit syllabic trellises; but there is no such thing as a poem.

<~> 30-Apr-04/11:58 AM
the bleeding is very nicely done, aetius, and i like the analogy to amish tables but the words "polished clean through much erasure;" don't fitwith it--they trip them selves up. give them harder sounds to match the table's angles.

vomit--vomit. monsters unleashed--yesyes--

wild apples sewn by the mad--are you mad? why not the birds? why not by orchard-raiders chased off the land by athe tenant-farmer??

tame roses--ah, now that thorn soothes ,me. now you're back on track...





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