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Lose That Too ! (Lyric) by recherche

Lost the morning sun again The dew upon the dale , Wings of dove and butterflies Breezes as they wail . Lost another noon of blue One more kiss of rain , All the flowers bloom today Nighttime as they wane . Lost a silent starry moon Upon a summer's rill , And the valley's marigolds Sweet with daffolds . Lost another gaze of night Upon a mountain's view , Even if I tasted love — I'm sure to lose that too ! ___________________ 4 - 10 - 04

recherche 27-Apr-04/8:41 AM
Howdy y'all ... hypatia , thank u kindly for your sweet comments !!!

Shuushin ...whoops , u be correct (its daffodils) sorry! me bad thank u very much !

Zodiac ... thanks for you comments , me likes your direct honesty ... no problem ... (one man's pleasure is another man's poison). In terms of flowers and such , well thats the way my mind invisions a surreal dreams or world .. poetry can be fiction or non- fiction ... its left up to the reader to delve into the mind of poet , writer , a composer of music etc ... and everybody has different tastes ... thats what make the world so beautiful , its complexities ? I would like your insight please ... do you know the crux of the verse and what i'm trying to convey ? AGAIN , am i speaking figuratively or literally in terms of the valley or i know , does it matter ...lol by the way , i could use vale instead of dell or dale , only a matter of semantics ... or course i could use dell and then HELL ! which might be to your liking methinks ... just kidding ! you said the last two lines are a train crash ... again what am i trying to convey or again does it matter ? serious ... thank u kindly for the crit... take care recherche

Recha ... not really ... can u explain the verse , what's my inner animus saying if u care or not ... marigolds in a valley ... me seen them , well in my dreams , which in fact are surreal methinks ... am i not a realist when it comes to poetry ... only in the real world ...methinks lol... getting serious thank u so much for stopping by to comment! good or bad crit , I do appreciate it ... take care recherche




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