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Deceiving (Free verse) by Ice

symbols: | **=narration| []=sound | ____________| *inside a classroom with boring teacher* I am thinking of you again It's the nth time You flashed in my mind God! How can it be possible? To crave for you so strongly cold sweat racing pulse sleepless nights To think we have never been together Despite what others say That you are wrong That it'll be a big mistake If I start It'll be digging my own grave You linger continuously and unceremoniously in my consciousness and in my dreams You have the power To suffocate With your long slender delicateness very slowly taking the lives of many Whose lips you have graced a lot Without remorse Not a hint of regret But I cannot help it The hunger is unbearable Stories of addicting warmth You never fail to provide haunts me at night at day anywhere I want you A taste of Sweet Bitterness perhaps Forgetting reality In your intoxicating presence My resolve is weakening each day What shall I do? It seems the choice is obvious My mind will not let me rest Surrender is Inevitable I know where you'll be I'll come to you I'll let you in Even for some blissful moments I swear Just this once Just one perfect Memory with you... *bolting to the door, unmindful of the curious stares following dashing in front of a store, sheltered underneath a tree's shade* There you are... *Taking hold of some coins, then the match* [chk,chk] *Inhale* Ahh at last... ---End---

Shuushin 23-Apr-04/8:29 PM
I do like the idea of adding some sound effects, etc. - but not enough of it here to realize that idea.

This is just so classic a pimple - the one word I come to is "endearing".

But this subject has been so done. and done.




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