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#20 (Haiku) by mikejedw

The breeze creeps with feet blistered by the now-dead frost, dampened on new grass.

Shuushin 20-Apr-04/12:07 PM
haiku shouldn't ryme, roundeye (nor should they really sound "poetic").

I'm serious, I didn't make this crap up. Change "feet" to "knees", and it will make more sense with "creeps" - unfortunately you are still stuck with the rhyme.

dunno. have a 7




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