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China, Silver, and an Emerald Lipstick (Free verse) by Enkidu

Afraid I am, Afraid I stay The wrath of woman night and day Hear my plea I urge of thee Do not embark on Rage's fray She was caught, but she was hot The sun could burn so brightly not I do admit that little fit She threw hampered my clever plot I'll stand alone, right by my phone Waiting for that bitch of stone Just one plate you had to hate You broke upon the wall like bone My priceless wares, now through the air And flying with an ease so fair Preferring blue over emerald hue This love unwrapped by my affairs

Shuushin 13-Apr-04/6:34 PM
broken here:
"I do admit that little fit
She threw hampered my clever plot"

would rather seen "thrown" not bone rhyme with stone (bone is illogical)

"ease so fair" blows.




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