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Diary entry (edit) (Free verse) by richa

The omens gather like clouds: A hefty wood pigeon lands on a maple, upsets the grin of a wet leaf, rain falls on my head-- she is beautiful the butterfly claps, earth puts forth its crooked mirror.

Shuushin 13-Apr-04/6:05 PM
Well, I'm still a little miffed that you didn't come to my desperate aid on "The People" - but I forgive you.

hefty wood pigeon... is this a type of pigeon, or are you telling me the pigeon is hefty and made of wood? I sincerely thought the latter until I started trying to help you come up with a way to say it was hefty without saying "hefty". And now I feel dumb.

Is the last stanza part of a question?

maple it is, maple it isn't...




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