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Of Fortunes and The Future (Free verse) by thepinkbunnyofdoom

In the icey depths of somber smoke Behind painted beads and false promises With the scent of illusion made half truths There lies a woman wrapped in self decay Pouring words straight toward your fears Trying to make your wallet her's Its happening You see it You try and keep your distance But it happens everyday She eats good off another's stupidity There really is one born every minute So why do we rally behind them?

hypatia 10-Apr-04/9:51 AM
Please change "good" to "well," and "another's" to "your" if you wish to please me and let my words pour straight into you fears. Nice!




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