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she is... (Free verse) by Sapphire

of earth and spice, had carried in on wind crisp of air and orbs, sky blue tinged apple cheeks with flesh begging to be bitten flamed ropes falling over shoulders, i'm smitten

babbit11 17-Aug-02/8:28 PM
What are apple cheeks? "Had carried" is an odd transition and possibly inncorrect. It confuses the entire attempt.




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