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Breaking Breath (Free verse) by daniella

The breath lends itself, in a simple day, to mudra the poets' parched lips, releasing the clutch of the chest. The quiet glance inward, that garden deep downward. Inhaling to bring the daybreak even, and refine the waxing moon's glare. Pure and simply a silent breath. In daydreams emerging whatever life's meaning. A moment's pulse, its breadth of far reaching heart matters begin to flutter- on the barest silver, wing-tip, from this space and this time- of the mind into rhyme.

embersandenvelopes 5-Apr-04/8:41 PM
I liked the imagery but I got a little mixed and turned around while reading this. However, I think if you cleaned it up some, it would take away from the poem instead of adding to it. I think it's one of those that I have to keep reading several times over.




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