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Leaves, hope and dreams (Free verse) by aliena

Fallen leaves on the ground Are shooed away by the wind Sliding tumbling they go Down the road, swishing crackling Crunching sounds as they are crushed By footsteps and tires And the low rumbling thunder reverbarating like a distant jet approaching Mourns all things crushed and fallen Leaves, hope and dreams

zodiac

1-Apr-04/9:11 AM

There is no jet in this poem, only something compared to a jet. Probably thunder. What's weird is people usually say it the other way around - a jet sounds like distant thunder - not, that thunder sounds exactly like a jet. More importantly, why a jet, anyway? Were you just trying to think of something that thunder sounds like? You should consider whether it adds any meaning to the poem to have a jet brought in - rather than, say, a guy swinging a big piece of sheet metal, or a giant faraway shovel turning enormous amounts of earth. I think the approaching jet could mean something, but you don't give us any idea what. And you might want to check your spelling on reverberating. There, I just made it easy for you.

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