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Dreams and Galaxies (Free verse) by embersandenvelopes

The complications always came not from your existence but from harnassing your energy via the tether At your heart. you pulled me in using magnetism or gravity or proximity or maybe you just cast a spell- as if simple words and gestures could explain it. If I could reappear, I now might be a galaxy or and explosion of light at the start of a dream. This is the trick, minus the subtleties, as echoes are lost in the pressure of space like time endears ourselves to memory. Then maybe I could just cast a spell- as if simple words weighed enough to reclaim us.

embersandenvelopes 1-Apr-04/1:40 AM
In response, to clarify, I capitalized the "A" for a reason. I want it to be read 2 different ways. Well, maybe not quite so different but if you read it again, you may see what I mean. That is also why I left the 'y' lowercase. I do that a lot in my poems, should you come across it again.

The word "spell" was also repititious for a reason.


I agree with you that the reader might not be clear on what the poem is about, however my intention is to hopefully guide the reader into coming to their own conclusion in regards to how my words portray one portion of what may be going on in their life.

Anyway, thanks for the comments and I hope mine might have cleared some things up for you.




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