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Old Glory (Concrete) by Richard

/----------------------------------------------------------------\ | O L D | not a name to be used, taken lightly, casually | | |------------------------------------------------| | G L O R Y | it comes from within but humbly asserts itself | | |------------------------------------------------| | B R A V E | tiding, good omen for oppressed people worldly | | |------------------------------------------------| | S Y M B O L | this a new nation meant for, and by the people | | |------------------------------------------------| | A Y O U N G | man pledges daily allegiance, piously, serving | | |------------------------------------------------| | N A T I O N | earning its name through pride, and assistance | | |------------------------------------------------| | S E R V I N G | without regard for race, creed, origin, or God | | |------------------------------------------------| | F R E E D O M | the most basic human right to live, and breath | | |------------------------------------------------| | H O N O R | those who came before and those yearning daily | |----------------------------------------------------------------| | For a life without subjugation or a lingering death to slavery | |----------------------------------------------------------------| | Standing tall as a beacon of hope, soaring higher than tyranny | |----------------------------------------------------------------| | Raised by those whose hearts are full of expectation for peace | |----------------------------------------------------------------| | Colors, never running, waving honorably in the wind of freedom | \----------------------------------------------------------------/

Richard 30-Mar-04/5:45 PM
Zodiac,

I'm getting to know you a little more. But the first impressions you make, and not only to me, can be very antagonistic. I don't know whether you are purposefully trying to scare away new posters or what, but there are better ways to critique. For instance, 1st comment to new poster:
"Hello, my handle is Zodiac and I'm one of the resident critiquers around here, please refer to the following posts:

http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=80728
http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=81528
http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=86270

I'll let you off easy as this is your first time here, but after this the gloves are off."

This establishes rapport with them, it gives them a chance to validate your mandate on this site by reading previous comments, and then they are enlighten on what not to do on their next submission. By doing this you allow them the opportunity to improve themselves. It is the greatest gift you can give someone, whereas telling him or her how to do it only builds resentment.

If, on the other hand, it is your goal to start arguments for the sake of intellectual combat, they you're doing the right thing!

And by God, if they do drivel again, hit 'em with a dissertation!

I don't necessarily agree with everything you say about poetry, but I'm willing to give you a B+ (PoemRanker-8) on your views. Everything I write from now on will have more due diligence.

P.S. I do want to THANK YOU for making me think harder about what I write. I will admit though, I do have an overwhelming urge to write bad poetry just to spite you :)




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