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Old Glory (Concrete) by Richard

/----------------------------------------------------------------\ | O L D | not a name to be used, taken lightly, casually | | |------------------------------------------------| | G L O R Y | it comes from within but humbly asserts itself | | |------------------------------------------------| | B R A V E | tiding, good omen for oppressed people worldly | | |------------------------------------------------| | S Y M B O L | this a new nation meant for, and by the people | | |------------------------------------------------| | A Y O U N G | man pledges daily allegiance, piously, serving | | |------------------------------------------------| | N A T I O N | earning its name through pride, and assistance | | |------------------------------------------------| | S E R V I N G | without regard for race, creed, origin, or God | | |------------------------------------------------| | F R E E D O M | the most basic human right to live, and breath | | |------------------------------------------------| | H O N O R | those who came before and those yearning daily | |----------------------------------------------------------------| | For a life without subjugation or a lingering death to slavery | |----------------------------------------------------------------| | Standing tall as a beacon of hope, soaring higher than tyranny | |----------------------------------------------------------------| | Raised by those whose hearts are full of expectation for peace | |----------------------------------------------------------------| | Colors, never running, waving honorably in the wind of freedom | \----------------------------------------------------------------/

richa 29-Mar-04/11:22 PM
'I didn't totally cop out and buy a generic greeting card, I created my own.' - you created your own generic greeting card. Well done?!

You say that criticisms are arbitrary, it would be more accurate to call them general. By using cliches you claim people know what you are saying, but by using cliches all you are saying is 'I agree'.




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