poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on weeping tree by the indign.

Shuushin25 Mar 2004

"ponder yet a second laughter screen" makes me struggle.

drawers boxers redundant, fine but as a rationalization to mirror words in the next few lines - no.

this smells synthetic somehow; strung together from random thoughts then a pasting of the first line to the last to imitate structure and - done. Thats what it looks like anyway.