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Fire of Life (Free verse) by Katzclear

-Life is as a burning fire Giving you only a small time to accomplish something -What will you do with it? Toil in pain in learning a lifetime, only to die, and forget all? Put soul and heart into working and building, only to retire, and watch it fall? -Flames of life leap and dance before your eyes, Reminding you of how little time you have left. -Change to make them like you Only to tear yourself apart? Hide yourself from the outside world, Try and cover the bleeding scars? -The flames of life work deceptively Luring you in with warmth and light Once bring you in.... burn... New Scars many more times to wound. Was it worth it

hypatia 22-Mar-04/6:55 PM
Well said. I'd put "they" in "once bring you in" and a ? at the end. And I'd answer yes.




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