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Sometimes it Hurts... (Free verse) by mindsigns

i have a funny feeling whenever the wind blows i get butterflies constantly and when you lie beside me at night i speak my mind like i never really could before all my woes and unwashed clothes my pains and joys and middle of the night noise hardly touched wine and true love where you lie.

SupremeDreamer 13-Mar-04/8:03 AM
What ever happened to mixing pseudo-romance and farting as big No-No, rhymes & cliche aside? Maybe theres hope in using farts in a haiku about ass-licking.. as sick as that sounds.. its just more promising than the above poem.




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