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The Golden Rule (Free verse) by phbiscuit

"I would die for your sins. I love you all." I found something sweet in that Pepsi-Cola can with the pop top Stuck inside it, Clinking when I picked it up to Take a sip. He walked back down the street Where he sat in the shade Of a rusty stop sign And whittled away his time Painting pictures on postcards Of little towns where it seemed No one lived-- If the empty streets Were any indication. There was always a stop sign, though, Bright red and new Standing tall in the foreground As if he knew Someday, someone would drive through.

zodiac 6-Mar-04/12:46 PM
The first line makes less than no sense. I don't just mean in its relation to the rest of the poem, although in that department it is sorely lacking. But in a pure semantic sense as well. "I would. Die for you. r Sins I lo. Veyou All." It's like a foreign language. This poem would be a lot better without it. Stick with dirty backcountry semi-primates and their confused bits of wisdom.




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