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Thorns (Free verse) by poetandknowit

Nothing is spoken. The door is simply shut. The television gasping for clarity is switched off, allowing the room to offer itself to moonlight. Breathing seems amplified, air cold and indifferent and all matter lay dead in the shifting darkness. We are equal in blackness. Shadows separate across the bed reaching for trousers and nightgown, the clumsy religion of cowering to cover what is not concealed. I could say something, that is my right but they did not expect me so soon and there are things they need to talk about. So I open the door take a last look at the living room furniture, the Titian imitation on the wall and leave my house.

poetandknowit 16-Aug-02/10:59 AM

You are a bigger whiner than anyone could have ever imagined. What is wrong with the poem? You said nothing to that extent. Break it apart; attack it with intelligence not stupidity, you fuck. That is what I am saying. You have nothing constructive whatsoever to say. You think you are clever; you are just stupid. Simple as that. Say something relevant. And although there is a Kansas City, Kansas, I live in Misery. So, find something worthwhile to come up with regarding that state. Your ramblings on Kansas make you sound inept. Write poetry. That is all anyone is asking.




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