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Dream of a Vanilla Sky (Free verse) by smlink84

Dream of a Vanilla Sky Moderated Infatuation controlled By the Vanilla Sky, A man walks through the autumn breeze With two blind eyes Bound together, in old straw and twine. The third eye is between his lips and ears Existing but invisible. The last leaf of autumn falls In his left pocket, His shirt is torn and his feet are Blistered. He carries tears with the wasted years, His hair is white Like the first snowfall of the winter, Left untouched. The sky grows darker But the man walks and walks With his assortment of belongings, Dreaming old and new fantasies…. Wanton face and the pale skin, Foils with the lewd colors Of an autumn wind yet to be born. He has a beard now And he lies still, You can see him there Lying on the gravel on his back, Watch the little maggots Enjoy a delightful five star meal. The maggots are white Just like his hair, Under the Vanilla Sky.

zodiac 29-Feb-04/6:53 AM
All I'm saying is that people are going to think that. EVERYONE is. EVERY SINGLE PERSON ON THE WHOLE PLANET is going to think of the movie. Whatever you meant, that will be the result.

Think of it this way: say I wrote a poem entitled "I'm a Racist Pedophile". Even if the poem itself wasn't about me being a racist pedophile, people would probably think that about me, and I'd be more than a little responsible for that.

More accurately for your situation, say I wrote a poem called "I Live in The Matrix" - now what are the odds that I invented a metaphor for the empowered institution I'm required to subscribe to by the fact of my living on earth, and just happened to call that institution 'The Matrix' without having given any regard to the popular trilogy starring Keanu Reeves? They're pretty long; people are going to think I'm referring to the movie, which would be crap. Change it. CHANGE IT CHANGE IT CHANGE IT. And it's not like I'm criticizing an image you spent hours inventing yourself (or, incidentally, one which has anything really to do with the imagery of your poem,) so why defend it? Just think of almost any other adjective than vanilla and attach it to almost any other adjective than sky and you'll be alright.




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