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the wind's last crescendo (Free verse) by fair12

summer, and the air was warm like breath in an August bayou rain the front room sterile, but for the music stand, and the notes the wind would carry twelve strings and a rhythm of memories, fading like the last notes of childhood yesterday still lingers softly in the alcove’s of our souls, pulling at our heart’s songs, seeking that child who once learned to sing

Shuushin 23-Feb-04/6:35 PM
Verry sweeet. Touching without a trace of sappiness - surprised myself at the reaction.

well done.

I'm going to suggest, despite my liking it very much, that you replace "summer" with something more specific (either a particular day or a month). My immediate reaction was "overused word" - but you quickly pulled me into the body to forget.




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