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Memories (Other) by DevilTmptrss

Memories lined up, neat and in a row; tagged and labeled, the missing pieces show. Dark forgotten holes that brake the chain; necessary gaps to keep me sane. He stole from me what I held dear and now I'm left with only fear. The pain is so deep and I hurt so bad. A fake smile on a child so sad. I thought that it was finally done. That, at last, I could understand fun. But he's still here inside my head. He won't leave even though he's dead. My soul is so empty, just a black hole. He took so much, I want back what he stole.

Tarquin De La Bog 14-Aug-02/5:44 PM
Woeful. 1. For the verse 'But he's still here inside my head, he won't leave even though he's dead' you should be executed for the good of humanity. You only score for the almost reasonable opening gambit to this monstrosity.




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