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So Defined Is He! (Free verse) by jasondingus

You are as, so defined, intellectual and inspirational, Full of determination, and motivational, You are as, so do defined, Passionate and devotional, Which makes me, so emotional, You are as, so defined, Everlasting and enduring, nurturing but assuring, You are as, Webster, would say, Defined in every way, You are as, so defined, Shy and meek, strong but not week, You are as, so defined, Handsome and protecting, at times unsuspecting, You are as, so defined, Mysterious and serious, often a little delirious, You are as, so defined, Silly and senseless, at times relentless, You are as, Webster, would say, The Hopeless Romantic, of your day!

Christof 17-Feb-04/4:18 AM
Sort out these commas - you shouldn't have one after Webster, for example. And I'm confused by 'as' - you're not comparing him to anything, you're just making statements. The descriptions are nice though, and so are the rhymes.




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