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regret. (Free verse) by darby pyn

What a hollow faith you have in mind to leave your memories behind you know yourself much better than you think. bored contention bleeds late arrivals eyes on contact stare reprisals. numb a promise with contradiction lie in your sleep wake up alone. spinning down above my face focused on my past mistakes. naked like a new born poem caught between hell and home.

Shuushin 7-Feb-04/9:05 AM
I like it - rhyming scheme is subtle yet sophisticated.

I got a little caught up in that though, now I have figure out what the message is...




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