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I Go On (Free verse) by drumrgirl30

I keep my feelings to myself Emotions boxed up, on a shelf. My face may never show pain, though tears in my heart fall like rain. Cool as ice , on the outside I must be Never breaking, but solid as a tree. Bending slightly with life's wind Then standing straight and strong again. I save my tears and fears for the night, Keeping my pain and worry out of sight. Waking in silence with the dawn. With no word of complaint; I go on.

ho_hum 6-Feb-04/6:13 AM
Advice. Not advise. 'Advice' is a noun, 'to advise' is a verb. Perhaps a mastery of these linguistic subtleties (such as basic grammar) would be a worthwhile acquisition before you next decide to splurge another 13 lines of staggeringly awful shite on to the web. Next to this a Nigerian scam email reads like one of Shakespeares finest.

DEAR SIR I COMMEND MYSELF TO YOU
FOR I
A RELATIVE OF THE DECEASED MORGAN TSVANGIRAI
ENTREAT YOU TO JOIN WITH ME
IN A CONFIDENTIAL BUSINESS PROPOSITION
MILLIONS OF DOLLARS CAN BE YOURS
I NEED ONLY:
YOUR BANK DETAILS
YOUR EMAIL
YOUR HOME TELEPHONE NUMBER
YOUR COMPLETE AND BREATHTAKINGLY STUPID

TRUST AND CREDULITY.

At least there is some elegance to the language. AND arbitrary linebreaks. Without which NO poem is complete.

And another thing. If you are an American logged in to this site can I point out that:
"I could care less about that"
Means that you ascribe an amount of care greater than or equal to some arbitrarily small, positive epsilon. What you mean to say is:
"I couldn't care less about that"
Which means that you care an amount less than some arbtrarily small epsilon. Meaning that for any positive amount of care, you care less. This is a rigorous definition of not caring.

Could you please all take this on board? And in more general terms, think hard about the grammatical structure of what your write before you click on the 'submit' button.




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