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Day of Reckoning (Free verse) by Lenore

Like a sickly sweet smell from the depths of hell; your vision in my mind implores me, to fashion a death so vile and base, no mercy or peace can find thee. A villanous state my thoughts in dwell; enraged by your indignant apathy. How well you disquise your selfish intent, while the stench of your truth proves brashly. The blatent deceit in which you repeat, those ghastly yet savvy deeds; ignite me to smite thee, though no perilous warning impedes. Onward in lashing! Pure rage in the bashing! Your terror reign, incomplete! Cut down from your thrown and left all alone, to lie bleeding and wrought with defeat.

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 12-Aug-02/10:01 PM
I know it's tradition that when one of the 'real' poets on this site starts tossing off all over a poem, nobody else is allowed to say it's bad because otherwise they don't get it, but like what the fuck is so great about this one? It uses pseudo-olde language and vaguely rhymes and scans, and it expresses what I'm sure is a heart-felt emotion, but there's nothing worth mentioning in my opinion... this site is turning into poemwanker. first horus8 starts. then bachus, eager to be part of the 'let's go overboard being enthusiastic because then people will know we're real writers, we care about nothing but writing; that's our passion and we're of course completely unaware of the fact that we constantly go on about how it's our passion, because we're so absorbed in writing, and not the image, which is why we go on poemranker, not to get attention, but because some of the best poetry in the world is here' wagon, starts using sexual metaphor as a sort of coy but smug way of ladling out praise. Somewhere along the way usually 'razora' pipes up with her opinion, which will match horus8's. It's 10 times more insidious to tell people they're good when they're not to tell them they're crap when they're not.




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