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Covers (Free verse) by sonawrote

I've looked to find a resting place where I can be just me I've searched to own a sacred space where your soul is part of me tell me what it is you see when your looking in my eyes tell me why I feel you can uncover all disguise are you blinded by your mind of what you think you see? or can you see right through the disguise that covers me?

NanceXToo 31-Jan-04/11:32 AM
This is alright. The rhythm's good. But it's kind of...I don't know. Too generic, overall. I get no real vibe on the "I" or "you" portrayed here. They're kinda just cardboard cutouts. There's nothing that really gives you a unique voice. Oh, and "your looking" should be "you're looking"




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