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Covers (Free verse) by sonawrote

I've looked to find a resting place where I can be just me I've searched to own a sacred space where your soul is part of me tell me what it is you see when your looking in my eyes tell me why I feel you can uncover all disguise are you blinded by your mind of what you think you see? or can you see right through the disguise that covers me?

Shuushin 31-Jan-04/3:56 AM
It's quite close to something good but it's kept back a bit, i think, by some of the rhymes and that last part where disguise is repeated - somehow gets difficult there. I'd say worth re-working a bit.




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