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Do The Wash, Love (Free verse) by heartlessempath

I feel like old Dirty laundry Used and smelling of Sweat- still on the floor where you Left me. Do the wash, love I prefer to be Starch-fresh And hanging pristinely In a closet- untouchable and Smelling of cedar (the anti-moth)- Would you pre-treat Me? Just to make sure all the stains Are removed. I’m not as invulnerable as Once pretended And when you put me in Finally! Would you be sure to Read the tag? And take note- gentle, hand wash Instead of tossing me in On heavy soil And hoping I come out whole. Remember to do the wash, love.

andrewjthomas 26-Jan-04/8:28 PM
i don't think you need "(the anti-moth)"
it doesn't fit well with the rest of the poem
and i think most people can figure out what you mean anyway
the metaphor is very consistent and you pull it off well




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