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untitled 2 (Free verse) by yOum|n

drifting past this horrid life i'm clinging on dearly the tauntings and praises fading into nothingness my vision is blurred i can hardly see is it my eyes or the tears that are making me blind i can't see the shore anymore the people around they are gone i'm all alone the swirl of colours they are too bright is that light am i near the shore straining my eyes i thought i was near floating on with renewed hope suddenly i'm plunged into darkness i groped for somthing to hold onto the water is freezing i'm trembling cold, wet, hungry i want this to end when will i reach this shore where i'll feel safe and secure or will someone come in a boat and hurl me out of this state or am i destined to travel this journey alone they say i can survive this ordeal it'll make me stronger well maybe that is true but will i be able to reach this shore in one piece and to keep this faith when will all this end when hope is bleak the water is choppy i'm afraid i might drown into this velvet waters to sink and never see the shore again who will save me i'm so exhausted i do not feel like moving on anymore yet my heart tells me to when will i reach my destination?

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 8-Aug-02/4:58 PM
As soon as I read the title, I knew this poeme was going to be deep. But I did not realise how deep. It really touched me like no other poeme ever has! The struggle to reach the safety of shore symbolises my own stuggle with obesity. As I stuggle to reach the T.V remote, I am left with two choices: 1) Get up and walk to the remote 2) Eat until I grow so much flab in that direction that I can reach it without moving. My butler is preparing the necessary foods as we speak.




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