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the small drop (Free verse) by richa

Water, runs off the gutters onto sodden stone borders, a small drop hangs from long grass like the wet wax on a candle and it is this small drop that the gods long look down on through the glass house of this earth, and weigh from every angle as though they were a sunlight.

Goad 25-Jan-04/10:08 AM
I agree with zodiac except I don't mind "they were a sunlight". It made me pause and consider the last line more deeply. If you want to demarcate "Water" set it off with a colon or by giving it its own line.

Hmm, just a thought, what about "disguising themselves as sunlight" or posing as sunlight, or something along those lines?




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